tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-19336675.post7683040873344855488..comments2023-11-03T06:02:02.128-07:00Comments on By Ken Levine: A rookie writing mistakeBy Ken Levinehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/17305293821975250420noreply@blogger.comBlogger17125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-19336675.post-65595540359964116492016-02-06T06:29:48.586-08:002016-02-06T06:29:48.586-08:00I'd never heard of "on the nose writing&q...I'd never heard of "on the nose writing" until I heard it from a talk that Jerry Jenkins gave. Excellent post. When a person doesn't write "on the nose" it truly creates a more excellent and enjoyable experience! Susan Marlene https://www.blogger.com/profile/12644008271992138790noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-19336675.post-49719098980043469772013-09-10T13:44:36.523-07:002013-09-10T13:44:36.523-07:00Hugh Mann: I'm a retired engineer who wrote g...Hugh Mann: I'm a retired engineer who wrote good expository material for proposals and reports -- but --I'm not doing so well on fiction. However, as I read the comments, I see that they really boil down to "Be logical." I have read instances of certain situations' being established, and then treated in a different manner later.Hugh Mannhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00530654553480395088noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-19336675.post-64110824934232219072011-01-14T07:45:05.713-08:002011-01-14T07:45:05.713-08:00Ken,
I apologize for posting this here... feel fr...Ken,<br /><br />I apologize for posting this here... feel free to delete it if you prefer.<br /><br />I write a baseball blog that talks about esoteric stuff (I guess that's a good word for it - <a href="http://www.wezen-ball.com" rel="nofollow">Wezen Ball</a>), and I was wondering if you'd be willing to answer a couple of questions about a M*A*S*H* episode you wrote. If you'd be willing, you can email me at lar@wezen-ball.com<br /><br />Thanks.<br />-- Larry Granillolar @ wezen-ballhttp://www.wezen-ball.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-19336675.post-86371511960319275402011-01-14T02:54:30.131-08:002011-01-14T02:54:30.131-08:00Surely you're not decrying the greates line of...Surely you're not decrying the greates line of cinema dialog ever " Flash! I love you - but we only have 14 hours left to save the earth!"Dwauctioneerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08843297088592052263noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-19336675.post-56500942204223672011-01-11T21:27:58.673-08:002011-01-11T21:27:58.673-08:00I've always wondered who says that: "You ...I've always wondered who says that: "You always flirt with MY SISTER, Carol who we both have known since childhood so I don't really need to mention to you that I am referring to my sister, but just in case we have an audience..."<br /><br />That's turkey-writing right there.Niveeikhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12355295227386993509noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-19336675.post-7652294050008340542011-01-11T15:27:53.999-08:002011-01-11T15:27:53.999-08:00skyline was the worst movie I have ever seen and t...skyline was the worst movie I have ever seen and the on the nose lines were unbelievable. I mean it was a if a 7 year old wrote it. <br /><br />things like "open the door, hurry."<br /><br />OMGLantastichttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05891591046986191093noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-19336675.post-82292280675764483242011-01-10T23:27:50.362-08:002011-01-10T23:27:50.362-08:00Awesome post. Great things to keep in mind.
Conve...Awesome post. Great things to keep in mind.<br />Conversely, I think you could have great fun with this in a comedy situation where someone actually says precisely what they are feeling, and the other person thinks they are holding back the truth because it goes against human nature;<br /><br />John, "Sally, something seems to be bothering you. What is it?"<br /><br />Sally, "Well, to be perfectly honest, I didn't like the way you were flirting with Carol".<br /><br />John, "No, seriously... was it my desert? Table manners? What's bothering you?"<br /><br />Sally, "You were blatantly flirting with Carol. My sister! My sister with whom I've had a life long competitive relationship. Honestly... that's why I'm upset."<br /><br />John, "You don't like my pants?"<br /><br />Sally, "I'm going to cut your penis off now."Phillip Stamphttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14966451192326331485noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-19336675.post-23217357456676478762011-01-10T22:17:47.316-08:002011-01-10T22:17:47.316-08:00Bookmarked for future reference. [What I'm rea...Bookmarked for future reference. [What I'm really saying: "Great post, Ken! You nailed it!]<br /><br />Friday Question:<br />I'm curious to hear about any shows you may know of that premiered as a half-hour and were eventually turned into a one-hour show, or vice-versa. Am I crazy for thinking networks actually do this?Rudy Martinezhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13869858658467591832noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-19336675.post-77416472470490517192011-01-10T21:36:19.250-08:002011-01-10T21:36:19.250-08:00You would love the new pilot I'm working on. I...You would love the new pilot I'm working on. It's called "On the Nose". It's a family comedy, about a family...of Rhinoplasty surgeons.Robbnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-19336675.post-7893182757842839452011-01-10T14:31:50.164-08:002011-01-10T14:31:50.164-08:00And this is why most TV is made for and appeals to...And this is why most TV is made for and appeals to women.<br /><br />Then again, you could probably have a lot of fun with this if your cast included a best friend or roommate who is always direct and cut-to-the-chase. Have the other characters do the usual dance, then have him wander through the scene to provide the punch line as he grabs a beer from the fridge.Jasonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15164612896234645132noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-19336675.post-73039275338549837342011-01-10T12:38:54.496-08:002011-01-10T12:38:54.496-08:00Very useful. And free! Thanks.
BTW The "How ...Very useful. And free! Thanks. <br />BTW The "How Frasier Came About" post did the rounds on several comedy forums and was much appreciated. Cheers.Macnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-19336675.post-32259450224888131502011-01-10T10:50:00.265-08:002011-01-10T10:50:00.265-08:00This is great Ken, thanks a lot. More of these wou...This is great Ken, thanks a lot. More of these would be fantastic.Secondary Leadhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02937491589835812795noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-19336675.post-19315995583147623422011-01-10T10:18:01.843-08:002011-01-10T10:18:01.843-08:00This is good advice, but I feel like I've seen...This is good advice, but I feel like I've seen errors in the other direction to - characters that avoid disclosing their feelings about something long past the point when any normal person would usually to maintain some comic tension.Chadhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08964417852912045049noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-19336675.post-24140887384314032012011-01-10T10:15:25.626-08:002011-01-10T10:15:25.626-08:00Friday quesiton: I tried writing a script once, ju...Friday quesiton: I tried writing a script once, just for fun, and one of the hardest things for me was to introduce the characters and history in the 'pilot' without resorting to the whole 'as you know, Bob' thing. I'm a pretty good writer when it comes to stories, if I do say so myself, but when it comes to scripts I'm completely lost.<br /><br />What kind of 'show don't tell' exposition tricks do you hae up your sleeve?carolhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12955516243922725475noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-19336675.post-42408619872826742712011-01-10T08:18:07.377-08:002011-01-10T08:18:07.377-08:00I really liked this post.
Uh, I mean...
Look who...I really liked this post.<br /><br />Uh, I mean...<br /><br />Look who got visited by the Good Blog Fairy last night!Rodnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-19336675.post-3565152943527341712011-01-10T07:52:25.427-08:002011-01-10T07:52:25.427-08:00This is probably one of the most helpful posts I&#...This is probably one of the most helpful posts I've read. Thank you, and feel free to post other "rookie mistakes" anytime soon.Malindahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01393692044541147848noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-19336675.post-30627869320142728012011-01-10T07:01:35.164-08:002011-01-10T07:01:35.164-08:00Subtext is your friend.
This is why I loved Arres...<b><i>Subtext is your friend.</i></b><br /><br />This is why I loved Arrested Development so much, and why I have a problem with shows where you can see the joke coming from a mile away. Let me find the humor instead of force-feeding it to me. <br /><br />Modern Family is good with subtext... there are a lot of nuances and "joke grenades".Brian Hhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12302004228633331113noreply@blogger.com